ADR - Episode 504: Jeffuary - Nina the Killer Rewrite

[00:00:00] Oh hello and welcome to other named Rigomotis.

[00:00:20] I'm review cultist.

[00:00:22] I'm Mikey these tense rival.

[00:00:24] And I'm the gamer in yellow.

[00:00:25] And we're here to discuss those internet stories, most creepy and most pasta. Sure. I'm glad you agree with me. It's on recording now. I'm being facetious. It's hard. Anyways, yes. So yeah, Nina the Killer. This rewrite is by Doro 70 as when I went to Google, like.fandom.com slash wiki slash another creepy pasta wiki, I think, or some other group pasta wiki. I think is what the fearfic addresses.

[00:03:01] Yeah, yet another creep pasta wiki slash wiki.

[00:03:04] Jesus Christ.

[00:03:06] Are you reading this? And this is just a rewrite from that previous story. So, without further ado, let's get to brass tacks and see what we gave this initial recommendation. I'm gonna recommend it conditionally. I'm not going to recommend it. I am going to recommend it.

[00:04:21] Although I hate that I just said that.

[00:04:23] I know.

[00:04:24] I know.

[00:04:27] You know you like some of it. Chris. Life got a bit worse for Nina after that. While with bullying from Claudia and her goons from the original origin story of Nina, her teachers and parents not doing anything about that. And despite Nina getting good grades, no one liked cert school. Eventually, Nina learns of the stories of Jeff the killer and becomes infatuated,

[00:05:44] even attracted to the killer teen who has,

[00:06:47] and tear apart the plushie and leave her in the schoolyard to mope as the bell rings for next period.

[00:06:55] But Nina just wanders off into town, though feeling like she's someone's watching over her while she does this. Eventually, she gets home and finds that her parents are in her room and are removing

[00:07:02] all of the fan art of Jeff on the walls and putting it in the garbage, revealing her undone homework and Jeff himself there. He takes Nina and kisses her and they go on a crazy killing spree through town, living happily ever after. So this is all a fan fiction from Nina that was posted online to various creepy pasta sites before getting taken down when she went and killed her family but didn't succeed

[00:08:21] in killing Claudia before being caught and institutionalized. So I feel like it should actually read like this. I was pretty cautious about him at first, and that proved to be prudent as I soon saw what kind of person he really was. Okay, look. Yeah. I got a level with you.

[00:09:40] Yes.

[00:09:41] But there ain't no 11 year old girl using the word prudent.

[00:09:45] I guess she's quote unquote saying, but it sounded like the rest of the positive, which it's not. Or another correction would be, I was pretty cautious about him at first. And good thing I was because soon, because soon I said, well, saw what kind of person. Yeah.

[00:11:00] That kind of thing.

[00:11:01] Yeah.

[00:11:02] Cause they, yeah, that, yeah, it's that negative and then suddenly a pot.

[00:11:06] Like you, you expect the positive, but with it. Like just swap the two spots. Yep. But I'll move on to the next thing I have. The pain was so instant and sharp, but to me it was a euphoric pain that I never experienced in my life. I feel like it should be it's not actually going to burst. Yeah, it's the metaphor for like how you feel butterflies in your stomach or like, yeah, it's the kind of, it's being, I guess allegorical or like using using like descriptors that aren't

[00:13:42] literal.

[00:13:43] Anyway, moving on to the next, expect to be like crit critiqued by and some of that, or at least in terms of the genre, right? So. Yeah, and you can get past that by having the writer be like gifted for the rage and all that, but that can also only get you so far. Yeah. Yeah, the fact that it actually says like this has been proofread and and fixing. So it's like, I mean, they missed a couple of things, but like, otherwise, it was pretty well done.

[00:15:07] Yeah.

[00:16:06] The bully doesn't know what anime is it's that whole thing of like when you don't know what anime is you you say it wrong Like what is that Japan?

[00:16:07] Amation or like like that uh like that or like that anima

[00:16:12] But yeah the mop. Yeah that the manja

[00:16:16] Yeah, it's that kind of thing where it's like the person is like they're ignorant to it

[00:16:20] So they don't know how it's actually pronounced or where the big so they're saying wrong

[00:16:25] Yeah, because she's just a dumbbell

[00:17:21] They are Claudia's goons.

[00:17:22] They're there.

[00:17:23] Yeah.

[00:17:24] They are present.

[00:17:26] Yeah.

[00:17:28] I was kind of like this getting into notes. I was kind of hoping they would have more character in this one compared to the previous one, but they kind of didn't.

[00:17:32] No.

[00:17:32] Yeah.

[00:17:33] That's fine.

[00:17:36] All right.

[00:17:37] And then I have a conjunction junction.

[00:17:40] OK.

[00:17:41] And next stop, conjunction junction.

[00:18:50] turned into a habit. It's not like my teachers would notice, but then those three cunts, Claudia, Malcolm, and Yoni, had to ruin describe. It was perfect. But as soon as the door opened, everything went black as if I was suddenly unconscious. Finn. Wow. That had a beginning, middle and end.

[00:20:23] Everything.

[00:20:24] Just fade the black.

[00:20:25] Yeah.

[00:20:28] Um, yeah. moving in. This is actually pretty far in. My stepdad was snoring a lot of like a bear and I tried to deal with him without making any noise. I made my way next to my dad. Personally, sorry, personally, I don't think she should call him dad because like she hates him and considering all the events that follow this, she has no reason to be kind to bit it anymore.

[00:21:42] Like maybe she was forced to call him dad when he was alive, but like in writing post-mortem, talk about already. Okay. Well, let's yeah, let's dive into actual thoughts then with that. So I'm going to start with this one here. We'll get to the part that's connected to your previous thing. When I turned 12, I discovered something that forever changed my lifestyle. Normally, I would watch anime listen to music like jpop, play video games, or just play air guitar in my free time.

[00:23:04] But that day, I aimlessly surfed around the internet and found an urban legend called Jeff or he's or Freddy Krueger and he was just so angry at that. I mean, it's not a comparison. No. You can't do that. Yeah. But in all seriousness here, this bit here also kind of summarizes the state of mind of those who popularized Jeff the Killer in the early days.

[00:24:21] Like this paragraph here encapsulates the appeal

[00:25:22] Oh, there's a commentary here. Like it's actually like, it's not just like frivolous teen fan fiction of an OC character.

[00:25:30] There's actually like a meaning to it.

[00:25:32] I mean, 90% of the story, it is exactly.

[00:25:35] For 90% yeah, but that's the point.

[00:25:38] That was the point of that 90% was to show us that.

[00:25:42] Yeah, because like I there's going to be so I'll continue on with my notes and such. a single magenta streak. I even made my own choker with Jeff's name on it. Wow, this is a fully flesh. We actually like get a fully fleshed out description of Nina and it matches the look in the art that we have both in this in the story, which is like, well, in this story, it's a photo of a somebody cosplaying as Nina, but it also 100% matches Nina Jeff the Killer stories were getting really popular by the teens and the tweens and such. But I'll move on to the next thing I have here. It's a bit of a doozy in terms of quotes, but I wanted to get it all down for my comments and such.

[00:28:25] I decided to go home and go back to my room

[00:28:27] and think about what I should do. said firmly without bothering to look at me, my mother decided to explain their motive. Nina, listen, your obsession is affecting your results at school. I just got off the phone with a few of your teachers. They told me that not only have you failed every test for the past month, but you've

[00:29:40] also been doodling in class instead of paying attention, and you don't do your homework. the result, like even if her actions and her like her, how she's been acting and so that has been the result of being abused and by bullies. Like compared to the original story, I feel like maybe like the like in the original story that there was no comp, there's no there were no rec precautions.

[00:31:00] So like nobody was doing anything about Nina's like what Nina was doing.

[00:32:01] or like when things were going wrong and some of that. And I think about it now, it's like,

[00:32:02] well, I mean, like there's probably a reason for that.

[00:32:04] Like it probably wasn't actually like,

[00:32:07] they were, it probably wasn't maliciously,

[00:32:08] intently like, like that kind of bad stuff.

[00:32:11] It was probably just like, they weren't seeing it or like,

[00:32:15] or it just wasn't like,

[00:32:16] maybe it wasn't even as big a deal as I thought it was.

[00:32:22] A kid send them blue things that proportion.

[00:32:24] I, I even legitimately have that in my, my notes next.

[00:32:27] There's like, like kids like Jeff the killer did. Or like, I think the OG one like she was just like there's something wrong with her or like there's something infecting her and so with that. No, she was getting pushed and pulled by external forces in her life on and with her own sense of teen angst and helplessness, which eventually culminated

[00:33:41] into latching on to this urban legend killer who she felt connection with because they If you walked into your daughter's room, like your teen daughter's room, or pre-teen daughter's room, and found all these posters of like a serial killer, that's definitely 100% rag flags that you need to address, like right now, right now.

[00:35:03] Yeah, like she has honestly a better backstory than most Jeff's.

[00:35:04] Right?

[00:35:05] Yeah.

[00:35:06] Like this, and again, when Claudia's being killed in the story. I'm not gonna say that it's impossible,

[00:36:23] but it's pretty damn hard to pierce a skull.

[00:37:24] It did that's true. Yeah. Oh, yeah. You know, that's 100% true. Yeah.

[00:37:29] Because that is just what she's writing to make herself seem cool.

[00:37:34] Yeah. Because she's writing an OC killer character fan, then,

[00:37:39] and then goes on and actually kills her parents and almost kills Claudia, but then gets apprehended. So, uh, but I'll move on to the next thing I have here.

[00:37:46] This is where it got a little, after a little bit more of that, we get this. Claudia is currently in the hospital while Nina is being held in a psychiatric ward where she seems to wait every day for her prints to rescue her.

[00:39:01] So yeah, this whole thing, cringe and this situation without repeating the same teen-edge-lord fantasy BS that Jeff the Killer invokes by commentating on those themes and giving us sort of like, yeah, this is,

[00:40:22] this is like all you just read is one of those

[00:40:24] creep, those, those Jeff the killer OC killer, um, affiliated writings. So, um, so I was 100% down for that. Like once I got to the end, I was like, oh my God, this is actually really good. Cause it actually has a meaning. It has a, has a point to what we just read.

[00:41:40] Yeah. Me too.

[00:41:40] Yeah.

[00:41:41] I basically had the same sort of feeling cause like I was reading, I was like, huh, man, I mean, it's like, okay, I get it.

[00:41:47] It's all right.

[00:41:47] I guess.

[00:41:47] And then the very beginning. Yeah, and then that investigator. But like, yeah, we got that one par- like exactly, we got that one paragraph at the beginning. And then the rest of the story was just Nina the killer's like low down. But then that never came

[00:43:02] back again. Whereas this one kind of takes a similar gives us a conclusion at the very end. Like a conclusive like interesting narrative that's for us to for us to ponder and and talk about laughter. So yeah, I'm yeah, this one we are very different opinions on the things we were reading for these show. So it's, it's, it's, you just need it. Sometimes you just need a fresh set of eyes to give you some, some new ideas on the material that you presented.

[00:45:41] So

[00:45:43] the more idea behind the material is always interesting.

[00:45:46] It's just whether or not it's executed in a way that can like,

[00:46:45] that you suddenly went unconscious.

[00:46:53] And then suddenly woke up and then Claudia's parents were dead and then Jeff was there like.

[00:46:56] Oh yeah, that point is like, again, this thing is.

[00:46:59] Because it's all written as a story through her eyes,

[00:47:02] why didn't she write Jeff the killer

[00:47:04] doing a combat role through the window

[00:47:06] and like throwing a ton of them online. And this that she wrote her own fan fictions and hence why and this story itself is a fan fiction that she wrote before going and killing her parents and going after Claudia. I think perhaps this could be the whole blackout situation and then like Jeff popping up in them

[00:48:24] living happily ever after his killers could have been the the smile Yeah, like she's also like hot up on on adrenaline and maybe some blood loss There are actual reasons why the body may have just shut down at that point. Yeah

[00:50:45] to her to keep her safe because like maybe the parent came in with a fucking shotgun for all we do. And then he just wrecked it.

[00:50:49] Yeah. Wow. It is weird though. I agree. Yeah. Yeah. That whole bit ruined it for me. Here's the thing. She was getting straight A's throughout the year, but all that that that undone homework and failed tests were as her mom points out was from the last month. So in the last month, she had a sudden descent or down into like failing and some of that

[00:52:20] because what?

[00:52:21] Okay.

[00:52:22] Yes and no.

[00:52:23] Yeah.

[00:52:24] In Nina's eyes and Nina's story.

[00:52:26] Yeah.

[00:52:27] Yeah, that's exactly it.

[00:52:28] Yes. A whole bunch of good reasons to justify what she's about to do in real life. And she's basically living in her own head cannon. Of what's instead of what life actually is she's living in her own head cannon to justify that she's going to murder people. Yeah. Meanwhile in real life life's not that bad she doesn't need to do that.

[00:53:41] But she's kind of lost it.

[00:53:43] Yeah, she's she's given into like she probably was being picked on or something like that by Claudia.

[00:54:46] And she would just make more at school and she wouldn't need to take them like the drawings anyway. Like, we're the plush even.

[00:54:48] Is it an emotional support plush?

[00:54:51] Like, yes, that's actually it is.

[00:54:53] I think exactly by Mikey that this is exactly what the situation is.

[00:54:57] She's obsessed with this character and she's using it as a safety blanket.

[00:55:01] Even taking it like even having in her backpack makes her feel better.

[00:55:05] Make gives her the gives her the confidence.

[00:55:06] That's how obsession works. this past because she could draw more and she would still have the ones that were there. Counter to that, I hated sketchbooks as a kid. Not until recently, I stopped to use, not only until recently did I actually have, I actually started drawing in sketchbooks.

[00:56:20] When I was a kid, I liked to loose paper,

[00:56:23] usually like, and the only way I'd keep it together

[00:56:25] was sometimes with a clipboard or something like that, in some cases. Yeah. Like it's usually like because they have a bad like home life kind of thing or they're or like the other alternative is their, they're they get everything they want. They're spoiled and so they feel entitled and superior to other people. So. But yeah, there's unfortunately too many reasons that believe in this.

[00:57:40] Exactly.

[00:57:41] Yeah.

[00:57:42] Yes. Do you have the killer ninja kind of? Don't don't you I'm still I'm still waiting for fan art of gamer the killer audience. Oh don't do that send it to al denti rigabordis at gebell.com No, don't send it like That's where

[00:59:01] Are you honestly cut off? I don't know if you

[00:59:04] Send it to your recycle Okay. Gamer. So my first note, my life is better all the way through elementary school. In the first two years of middle school, I had no friends with, and I turned 12, I discovered something that forever changed my lifestyle. Okay. So I should, I don't remember if I looked into this more in the previous story.

[01:00:24] And if I did, I did this whole thing out because I don't fully remember how much we touched eight and then high school for grades nine to 12. And there, it's also referred to as primary and secondary school, respect, and then post secondary after that. That's how I heard about the education system all the way growing up. And I've heard the term middle school, but I've never like looked into it. So I just assumed, Oh, okay, that's just primary school. That's what

[01:01:40] that's referring to. But it's not. It's elementary school is

[01:01:44] grade one to five. Yep. for the middle school classes of six seven and eight. Okay, so I'm basically a country bumpkin I did find it interesting when I when I moved up here like up north I did end up in a public school or in a in a public school where like it was kindergarten to grade eight and I was like

[01:04:09] At least the school aspect, it makes more sense because they could actually be in the same building.

[01:04:16] Like just elementary and middle school, they're not necessarily separate buildings. I don't think they could still be in the same building, which would explain more

[01:04:22] why Claudia would be able to pick on Nina so easily because they're in the same school.

[01:05:20] You're less ignorant. Like you're more aware of like, yeah, like it's fine.

[01:05:24] Like again, like that's something, again,

[01:05:26] it's part of our like, our views and opinion

[01:05:28] or like our experiences and views color

[01:05:32] how we read stories.

[01:05:34] Because like if we're not,

[01:05:34] if you're not familiar with certain things

[01:05:37] and you don't realize the thing,

[01:05:38] you're going to, that's again,

[01:05:41] that's going to paint how you view a story

[01:05:43] or like how you view the setting of the stories.

[01:05:45] Cause like, it's like, wait,'s the thing like we're being more critical because we that's part of our whole thing is like we're we're reading the stories and recommending them if or not recommended them to somebody who may not want to do all the research or just want to listen

[01:07:03] to us or or just want to like oh is this I did it 10 times to stopwatch and then did math. Nice. I like my my seat better. Yes. It is way better.

[01:08:23] I'm just your dad like walking by the door is like, like stopping and then just like backing up.

[01:08:24] Okay.

[01:08:28] Yeah.

[01:09:24] Yeah, I do wonder though if okay this whole thing is

[01:09:28] Story written by Nina so it's

[01:09:34] Floured up and all that so she probably didn't do 500. No, it was probably like

[01:09:37] She probably did hands. She's like

[01:09:41] Yeah, I think that was about 500

[01:09:44] Well, I say that I had to do 500

[01:09:48] I have to make my work I just wanted to clarify. Yes, because there are multiple parent murders and things.

[01:11:00] And then when she basically got out of that up. It's like Bella, stop. No Bella. Don't do that. Yeah. Yeah, yeah, yeah. But in this case, it's a phantom like that of Jeff. It's like, yes, Nina, kill, kill. Make them go to sleep.

[01:12:22] But yeah. Yeah.

[01:12:23] I 100% agree because that's exactly how I was kind of.

[01:12:26] I also was wondering if that was what And I think there's merit in that, honestly, because like we, I think we even talked about last episode where like we don't, we don't encourage people to like get like, like connect with Jeff the killer and want to kill people because like, oh, it's just like Jeff the killer.

[01:13:40] Like he's free to kill people like with over repercussions.

[01:13:42] Like because he's bullied.

[01:13:43] It's like, yeah, no, that you need to some of the remakes of the rewrites that some people have done. It's like that gives it actually better plot points. Yeah, exactly. I'll let you finish this one point, I swear. All right, so Kanye. Yeah.

[01:15:01] I kind of want to go back and look at all the ones

[01:15:05] that I liked and read them back to back on the situation and even on the fandom of Jeff the Killer rather than just leaning into that weird Graham dark edge Lord tween fantasy aspect of it like of like oh you're being bullied So I'm going to I'm being bullied so I'm going to snap and become a killer and get revenge on all the people who hurt me

[01:16:20] it's like

[01:16:21] it's that's

[01:16:24] First off it's been done to death

[01:17:21] I do recommend this story completely. Like no, no conditionally, like check out Nina the Killer rewrite by Doros 70.

[01:17:27] Oh, that's the name.

[01:17:29] Yeah.

[01:17:29] By Doros 70, it's, it's a cool, like commentary on the fandom of, of Jeff the

[01:17:35] killer.

[01:17:35] So I do, I do fully recommend.

[01:17:38] I'm trying to change your recommendation.

[01:17:39] I would just like your, your, because like I remember, because like when I, when I

[01:17:43] first wrote this down, I was like, I will recommend this conditionally.

[01:17:45] And I even like put it as like, I'm going to partially recommend this on the high

[01:17:49] end conditionally. still don't like the ending. Because it just still thinking about it, like how she pre meditated that she would I was like simultaneously feeling sorry for her and also holding my eyes at how literally all the worst things were happening all the time

[01:20:20] to her.

[01:20:22] It seemed very real how bad everything was, which by the end was exactly the case.

[01:21:25] an aisle immature, but it's something that kids do because they don't really have a full grasp of the world.

[01:21:26] Yeah.

[01:21:27] And like her parents said, nine times out of the 10, your parents are punishing you

[01:21:35] for your own good.

[01:21:37] Yeah.

[01:21:38] And it, I don't know if most kids understand what that even means.

[01:21:42] No, they don't.

[01:21:44] They just think, oh, my parents are assholes because they're assholes.

[01:21:47] No, they're yeah, all that. All this is fictitious and like a fan of Nina. Like, oh, it's just it's her.

[01:23:00] It's her own fantasy that we're what we're reading.

[01:23:02] Okay.

[01:23:03] Well, I've only went like weird and like from. Like this on this angle, right? Yeah. Yeah. Pretty much. And again, I like that there's repercussions to it because every other Jeff the Killer story, they get away, Scott free, and the cops do nothing about it. Yeah. And they could just live happily ever after.

[01:24:21] Meanwhile, that is not the case.

[01:24:23] That's not how things work.

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